Using the "Office of Christian Parents" from yesterday as a guide for parenting youths, please write a letter to either the Capulet or Montague parents regarding their children's behavior in Act 3, sc. i as we have seen today and read last night. Use specific examples/ advice from "Office.." to bolster your point.
It should include:
A. Proper greeting
B. 3 specific Citations from "Office..."
C. Proper Closing
Capulet
3847 Cap ave.
London, England 90811
Montague
9734 Mon ave.
London, England 90812
February 8, 2008
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Capulet,and Montague
I am here to observe how your child was behaving yesterday, afternoon. Your child was showing disrespect to others, fighting, and there was deaths from the Montagues and Capulets. It was Tybalt Capulet and Mercutio Montague. Mr. Mercutio Montague was making a fool of himself, like he knows the world. He, also, started the tease to Tybalt, which made him show his temper. Then, Tybalt mocked Mercutio by spiting his disgusting saliva on his hand and rinsed with the water that Mercutio was in. That is not just the most nonsense fooling. They've started to fence with their sword, to prove who was the best. They haven't thought of the danger of fighting, and actually took the risk.
I want to encourage you as parents or guardians to teach and show your child how to be a good Christian and a Noble gentle men. If they get taught of how, they would pass this lesson or be a good role model to their next generation. Which this can spread Christianity to the country and make it better with peace.
Your child should not be brainwashed by any women,that only ask for sexual action. As to be a Christianity and Nobel gentle men, they'll have to keep control of their wives, no gambling and other addictive, bad activities
If you are indeed to care, please teach your child to be a good Christian and a gentle man. I believe you don't want any more accidents in your family, and make this country a terrible sight. Practice Christianity with your child. It is important to have peace in our country.
Thank you for your time,
Lily Duong
Clairmont JoJo #273
SD CA 98342
3 comments:
Capulet
3847 Cap ave.
London, England 90811
Montague
9734 Mon ave.
London, England 90812
February 8, 2008
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Capulet,and Montague
I am here to speak[are you writing or speaking] to you about how your child was behaving yesterday,[sic] afternoon. I've witnessed your child was showing disrespect to others, fighting, and there was deaths[usage, tense] from the Montague[s] and Capulet[s]. It was Tybalt Capulet and Mercutio Montague. Montague was acting like a fool of himself[making a fool of...], by believing he is all that[don't understand your meaning]. He, also, started the tease to Tybalt[usage], but Tybalt was being extremely serious[choose a different adjective- doesn't make sense in this case]. Then, Tybalt messed with Mercutio by spiting his disgusting saliva on his hand and rinsed with the water that Mercutio was in. That is not just the most unacceptable, nonsense fooling,[choose a clearer transition] they've started to fench[fence] with their sword, to see who was the best. They've[too many haves] haven't thought of the danger of fighting, and actually took the risk. Now they're dead within guilt in their spirits.[unclear]
I want to encourage you as parents or guardian[pl.] to teach and show your child how to be a good Christian and a Noble gentle men. If they get taught of how, they would pass this lesson or be a good role model to their next generation. Which this can spread Christianity to the country and make it better with peace.
Your child should not be brainwashed by any women[,]that only ask for sexual action. As to be a Christianity and Nobel gentle men, they'll have to keep control of their wives, no gambling and other addictive, bad activities
If you are deed[indeed] to care, please teach your child to be a good Christian and [a]gentle men[man]. I believe you don't want any more accidents in your family, and make this country a terrible sight. Practice Christianity with your child. It is important to have peace in our country.
Thank you for your time,
Lily Duong
a.k.a your adviser.[address]
Lily,
there is a lot to fix. Please work on this a bit more to clear up any confusion a reader might have. As of now your grade is 3/5, if you make the corrections, your grade can be 4/5 to 5/5.
Thanks a boodle,
T
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